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Tuesday 25 September 2018

late for school

My next story is about  me being late for School and I tell  the reason why I was late for school  this story is made up I hope you enjoy. Please give me feed beck so it can help me with my next journey of work


I came in class and I was  late Mr Mitchell asked me why I was so late? So I told him it was quite a funny story. I said I woke up too brush my teeth but I realized  it was not tooth paste it was foot cream then I went to go get dressed but my close where on backwards and I did not notice after I went to get in the car with my close on wrong but I forgot my shoes so I had to go back into  the house my mum yells (THERE IS A SPIDER IN MY HAIR) now all of us girls are screaming for our life because it was a hairy scary spider it jumped on it mum's head. and then my brother comes with a broomstick and said (I will fix this) and with one swing he hit my mum head to get the spider out but my mum was out cold   so we had to call the ambulance and get her help but the ambulance broke down so they needed a tow truck but that tow truck broke down so the biggest tow truck in the world came and lifted the ambulance the small toe truck and the big toe truck to safety so we caught a taxi to get to school but the taxi took us all the way to america so we had to walk all the way to Hornby and then you asked my why i was late. I looked at Mr Mitchel and i notice he was wearing headphones he took them of and said( why are you not telling me why you were late)  I look at Mr Mitchell in a grumpy look and i took a deep breath and I had to tell my big story aging.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Tennessee nice work but you need to put full stop and commas and paragraph but nice work though

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